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Thursday, July 31, 2014

Show don't tell-Miss Smith

For two days we have been working with Miss Smith for writing and we have been focusing on show don't tell. We were doing this to make our writing more interesting.  Can you guess how I'm feeling if you can comment below and I will reply.

WALT show not tell in our writing
WILF
I will begin by describing what the characters body felt like.
I will describe what they were thinking
I will leave the audience hanging
He dragged his hands down  his  face in stress. Bang Bang Bang he was pounding the wall like King Kong. His face started to boil as he wiped the sweat from his forehead.  He throw a chair at his mirror with tears running down his cold cheek. He started to think how he was going to fix what he had done..…..

2 comments:

  1. Mīharo Liona. Is your character a bit angry? It sure sounds like he is throwing a great tantrum! I love your expression and sound effects in your recording. You might need to re-read your writing as there are a few parts that don't quite make sense, but they do when you listen to it with the audioboo! Great job Liona!

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    1. Yeah he is angry and a bit frustrated as well.

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